I had to sit with this one for a moment. The voice is so controlled that when the crack appears it lands quietly, but heavily. The heart detail was beautiful, because it carried memory without saying it.
But that line about the runway… that’s the one that stopped me.
You don’t explain it, you just let the weight of it sit there, and the reader arrives at the truth a breath later. This story carries such powerful restraint. Sometimes the quietest sentences carry the most sky behind them
That means a lot coming from you, it truly does especially the note about restraint. I kept feeling like the piece only worked if I didn’t explain too much and just let the weight sit where it landed. I’m really glad that came through.
And the runway line… that one sat with me for a while before I wrote it. Thank you for reading it so closely.
Okay, I just read it now. 😂 I’m intrigued where this is going. You take me back in time!
This is a killer:
"You can drive home and check a stove.
You cannot revisit a runway once it has taken someone."
My daughter and I are reading The Little Prince, and I plan to do some additional digging into Antoine de Saint-Exupéry. Have you read any of his memoirs? He was a pilot. A pilot who disappeared in his plane.
@aviationml has some interesting stuff happening right now, too, btw.
Cannot wait to read! But give me a bit, my reading schedule is outpacing me these days. I no longer have a moonlit red-eye jump seat with an unconscious first-class. 😂
So fucking good!! Sloane!!
Thank you! I’m glad you liked it. Definitely was nervous no one would read or like it but thanks for the push friend!
I had to sit with this one for a moment. The voice is so controlled that when the crack appears it lands quietly, but heavily. The heart detail was beautiful, because it carried memory without saying it.
But that line about the runway… that’s the one that stopped me.
You don’t explain it, you just let the weight of it sit there, and the reader arrives at the truth a breath later. This story carries such powerful restraint. Sometimes the quietest sentences carry the most sky behind them
Fabulous writing
~ Nerra ⚔️ ⚡️⚔️
That means a lot coming from you, it truly does especially the note about restraint. I kept feeling like the piece only worked if I didn’t explain too much and just let the weight sit where it landed. I’m really glad that came through.
And the runway line… that one sat with me for a while before I wrote it. Thank you for reading it so closely.
Okay, I just read it now. 😂 I’m intrigued where this is going. You take me back in time!
This is a killer:
"You can drive home and check a stove.
You cannot revisit a runway once it has taken someone."
My daughter and I are reading The Little Prince, and I plan to do some additional digging into Antoine de Saint-Exupéry. Have you read any of his memoirs? He was a pilot. A pilot who disappeared in his plane.
@aviationml has some interesting stuff happening right now, too, btw.
Looking forward to Ch. 2 Crosswind!
Cannot wait to read! But give me a bit, my reading schedule is outpacing me these days. I no longer have a moonlit red-eye jump seat with an unconscious first-class. 😂